While many students decide to apply to Yale for its prestige, the motivating factor for me was an innocent summer activity.
I learned about Yale last summer when I served on the Executive Committee and taught for a program in New Haven, called Summerbridge New Haven.
This program, based out of the Hopkins School, allows high school and college students to mentor andteach inner-city students who cannot afford a tuition-based program.
Two of my co-workers were Yale students, and they informed me that Yale made majorcontributions to the program. Moreover, Yale generously offered the use ofits facilities, including field trips to the Yale Daily News and other Yalesights that provided invaluable experiences for the students, some of whom had never toured Yale despite living in New Haven their entire lives.
今天以九牛團隊收到的緊急求助案例為例，以“受害者”真實經歷為切入點，剖析申請者失敗原因，藉此提高學弟學妹明辨真偽、規避風險的能力。
求助學員：張同學
合作專案：文書PS
求助原因：11月第一輪投遞全軍覆沒
求助時間：網申前1月
合作機構成品展示：（節選）
While many students decide to apply to Yale for its prestige, the motivating factor for me was an innocent summer activity.
I learned about Yale last summer when I served on the Executive Committee and taught for a program in New Haven, called Summerbridge New Haven.
This program, based out of the Hopkins School, allows high school and college students to mentor andteach inner-city students who cannot afford a tuition-based program.
Two of my co-workers were Yale students, and they informed me that Yale made majorcontributions to the program. Moreover, Yale generously offered the use ofits facilities, including field trips to the Yale Daily News and other Yalesights that provided invaluable experiences for the students, some of whom had never toured Yale despite living in New Haven their entire lives.
◆ 首先本文花了大量筆墨用來“跪舔”申請學校，幾乎用了70%以上的筆墨，基本沒有展示申請者在文書中“我”的核心內容。
◆ 可以看出文中很多描述的是yale的特有特色，但機構方在幫同學申請其他學校時，只是簡單更改了學校名稱，其他基本不變，從而“牛頭不對馬嘴”。
◆ 最核心的問題：其中幾所申請學校給到拒信的理由是：
“The content highly resembles some works from our previous applicants”.說白了就是套模板被發現了，跟之前申請者的材料撞車了，這也是導致申請失敗最直接的原因。
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