Original:Solving trivial problems in the dorm will add your socialexperience and help you to understand other people"s feelings and learn to bekind.
Revised: Solving trivial problems in the dorm will enrich your socialexperience and help you to understand other people"s feelings and learn to beconsiderate.
另外,我們常見的一些累贅用詞表現在句意的理解上,比如:He has had many years of (actual) experience inbusiness.(他有多年經商的經驗)actual是多餘的,因為experience已經有actual的意味了。
We assembled(together) all the parts for our radio.(我們裝好收音機的零件)assemble本身就有together的意思,因此together是多餘的。“平等相處原則”的意思是行文不出現明顯的帶歧視或偏見的字眼,包括男女性別,也要避免區別,以示“平等”。例如:
Many businessmen(businesswomen) feel their jobs are very stressful.(許多商人覺得工作壓力很大) 這句話寫 businessmen或是businesswomen都是不妥當的,可以改為 business people或business executives或business managers就可以包括男女了。
相信不少考生都堅信託福寫作字數越多越好,其實不然,如果明明可以使用一個高階詞彙或者句式就能夠正確表達的話,完全不需要寫太多不必要的文字。
例如:At this point in time,we should pull together for our goal.(現在我們應該為我們的目標團結一致)這句話中“At this point in time”表示“現在”,我們完全可以用now來代替。
In the majority of cases,he likes to ride bike to the office.(他通常喜歡騎單車到辦公室)。很簡單的一句話,完全可以寫成 He usually likes to ride bike to the office.
託福寫作經驗提出平時我們所說的用詞多樣化和地道並不是體現在這些時間副詞或者是完全可以簡化的囉嗦句型上,而是指實用性極強的詞如動詞和形容詞,比如:
Original:Solving trivial problems in the dorm will add your socialexperience and help you to understand other people"s feelings and learn to bekind.
Revised: Solving trivial problems in the dorm will enrich your socialexperience and help you to understand other people"s feelings and learn to beconsiderate.
add,kind表達的含義都比較寬泛。add可以指數量上的增加,也可以指程度的加強,對於“豐富經驗、增加知識”這個意思,用enrich會使表達更準確。kind從字面意義上講是“好的、善良的”,用kind來形容人無法具體地表現出一個人的性格特徵到底怎樣,原句中是想表達“考慮周到、體貼入微”的特點,要準確表達這個含義應選擇considerate。
另外,我們常見的一些累贅用詞表現在句意的理解上,比如:He has had many years of (actual) experience inbusiness.(他有多年經商的經驗)actual是多餘的,因為experience已經有actual的意味了。
We assembled(together) all the parts for our radio.(我們裝好收音機的零件)assemble本身就有together的意思,因此together是多餘的。“平等相處原則”的意思是行文不出現明顯的帶歧視或偏見的字眼,包括男女性別,也要避免區別,以示“平等”。例如:
Many businessmen(businesswomen) feel their jobs are very stressful.(許多商人覺得工作壓力很大) 這句話寫 businessmen或是businesswomen都是不妥當的,可以改為 business people或business executives或business managers就可以包括男女了。